I'm in the middle of my first draft of the horse show mystery, so I really don't have much to say on the blog, except:
OH MY GOD THIS BOOK IS STUPID WHY DID I START WRITING THIS IT SUCKS!
Which is how I usually feel around the 40,000-word mark. Not to worry. The plan of attack is to slog through the mire, get to the end, dig the last hole out of the tunnel and reach the sunlight. Then I put it on the backburner for a few weeks to get some perspective.
In the meantime, I couldn't just leave the post up about the free Kindle promotion, so here's something to make your Monday a little nicer. (And maybe your Tuesday and your Wednesday, depending upon when I get back here.)
"The notion that such persons are gay of heart and carefree is curiously untrue. They lead, as a matter of fact, an existence of jumpiness and apprehension. They sit on the edge of the chair of Literature. In the house of Life they have the feeling that they have never taken off their overcoats."
- James Thurber, My Life and Hard Times
- James Thurber, My Life and Hard Times
Showing posts with label western mystery. Show all posts
Showing posts with label western mystery. Show all posts
Monday, August 12, 2013
Sunday, January 27, 2013
The hard way every time
Well, now I'm in a pickle.
In working on the new mystery, I decided that one love interest might be boring for the reader in that "of course they'll get together" kind of way. I mean, Willie's been alone for a long time and doesn't realize she might be ready for a relationship, and Tyler has been severely hurt and doesn't want to risk getting hurt again.
They're made for each other.
But creating another man who might also awaken Willie's heart was a problem because I thought I wanted Willie and Tyler to be together in the end. At first, I considered the man who is perfect for her in every way except that he doesn't stir anything in her.
That wouldn't do. The reader would see through that and wonder why I bothered.
Then I thought of a man who would pursue her, as opposed to Tyler, who won't make his feelings known. It sounded like a good plan. Most readers might still want Tyler, but a gregarious new guy who knows what he wants and goes out to get it would keep them guessing.
Thomas Macy is one of the detectives who will be investigating the murder at the horse show. I based him on this guy:
I picked him because he's a straightforward cop, imposing in that "Vincent D'Onofrio, Law and Order: Criminal Intent" kind of way without any of the side trips to Crazy Town. I mean, Bobby Gorin was a fascinating character to me, but at the end of the day, came with too much mental illness baggage to be a love interest. Plus, Matthew Macfadyen was a rather breathtaking Mr. Darcy in Pride and Prejudice.
What could go wrong?
When I actually wrote Thomas' journal (while watching Ripper Street), something surprising happened. Here's what he told me.
In working on the new mystery, I decided that one love interest might be boring for the reader in that "of course they'll get together" kind of way. I mean, Willie's been alone for a long time and doesn't realize she might be ready for a relationship, and Tyler has been severely hurt and doesn't want to risk getting hurt again.
They're made for each other.
But creating another man who might also awaken Willie's heart was a problem because I thought I wanted Willie and Tyler to be together in the end. At first, I considered the man who is perfect for her in every way except that he doesn't stir anything in her.
That wouldn't do. The reader would see through that and wonder why I bothered.
Then I thought of a man who would pursue her, as opposed to Tyler, who won't make his feelings known. It sounded like a good plan. Most readers might still want Tyler, but a gregarious new guy who knows what he wants and goes out to get it would keep them guessing.
Thomas Macy is one of the detectives who will be investigating the murder at the horse show. I based him on this guy:
I picked him because he's a straightforward cop, imposing in that "Vincent D'Onofrio, Law and Order: Criminal Intent" kind of way without any of the side trips to Crazy Town. I mean, Bobby Gorin was a fascinating character to me, but at the end of the day, came with too much mental illness baggage to be a love interest. Plus, Matthew Macfadyen was a rather breathtaking Mr. Darcy in Pride and Prejudice.
What could go wrong?
When I actually wrote Thomas' journal (while watching Ripper Street), something surprising happened. Here's what he told me.
Can’t really say how I got where I am, but there you have
it. I was born in Norwich, England and raised by me mum and dad with four
sisters. Dad worked for the oil company. Mum stayed home. I never gave too much
thought to what would become of me. I’d go to school, then work the oil company
like Dad.
Sissies all went about getting married and having babies. I
was the youngest myself. When I got out school, I was supposed to start work
at end of month. Then my girl, Lizzie, said she was going to university and
couldn’t be seen with an oil worker. What’s a fella to do?
I enrolled with her, at University of Anglia in town. Didn’t
much think of what I’d get out of it, except to be near Lizzie. Took writing
classes. Liked them. My best story was about the girl who talks her boyfriend
into going to college with her, then leaves him for another chap.
Call it memoir.
Lotsa blokes lose their girls. It’s not a big deal. Funny
how it turned out that way to me. Guess I was so used to an ordinary life, no
highs or lows, I just thought we’d roll on out to our graves together. Me and
Lizzie.
After that, I quit. University, working, living. I breathed
when I had to.
It was Mum who saved me. Came home one day with a plane
ticket to America. Bless her soul, she doesn’t know very much about the
country, so she got me a ticket to Los Angeles. “It means City of Angels,” she
said. “You need an angel to guide you out of this.”
I tramped around L.A., serving as a waiter and a clerk and
anything else that would pay for a one-room flat and an old car, one that I banged
up frequently because I couldn’t get used to driving on the wrong side of the
road. Still, I wasn’t mixing with folks, even the ones I worked with. I learned to like baseball. Cold beer and nachos with the blokes. Girls
would flirt, but I felt so empty, it was like they were batting their eyes at a
seashell. Nothin on the inside but an echo.
Got a job at a little café in Burbank, local family place
but really friendly. One night, I was closing up. It was me and the cook Gussie
left. The owner had already left with the night’s deposits, and Gussie had to
clean the grill again after a mob came in five minutes before we closed and ordered
full breakfasts. I told Gussie I’d stay to see her to her car.
He came in through the back door, the one she’d propped open
to take out the trash. Young kid with a gun bigger than his head, it seemed.
His eyes were wild. He just kept asking for the money. I opened the till,
showed him it was empty. He wanted the safe. We didn’t have a safe. The owner
always took all the money at night and brought the till money in the morn.
Gussie was a big strong woman who had no patience,
especially at two in the morning after a full shift. She opened her bag and
threw a few dollars and change his way. “This is all you gonna get, Fool.”
She shouldn’t have done that. Her quickness, her hand
throwing, it all startled him. His finger jerked on the trigger, the gun
exploded, and Gussie fell. After being so afraid of being shot, I suddenly
forgot he was in the room. I reached the phone on the counter and dialed for
the police. Gussie was hit in the right side. I got a towel and pushed on the
blood, tried to tell her she’d be okay.
That’s what you say, whether you believe it or not.
When I looked up, the young man was gone. I could hear the
sirens, so I just kept pressing on Gussie’s side.
“Talk to me, baby,” Gussie said. “I just love to hear you
talk. It’s so pretty, like one of them romances in the old movies.”
I talked until the medics arrived, then I held her hand on
the way to the ambulance. The last thing I did for her that night was to call
her husband and let him know where they’d taken her. The medics seemed to think
she would pull through, and thanked me for keeping pressure on her wound.
“She could have bled out without you,” they told me.
The police questioned me for a while. I thought I’d grow
tired of their questions, but they intrigued me. The more they asked, the more
I thought about the young man and the gun and the circumstance, and was able to
give them descriptions. They thanked me for my help.
I woke up the next day and did the most amazing thing I’ve
ever done. I applied to be a police officer. The Burbank police department
accepted my application, and after requisite training, I became a copper. My
mind and body were completely absorbed by the job, so much so that promotions
were easy, until I was made detective. I’m good at my job, and consider it my
goal to help the victims.
My heart, however, remains as ever, dead and buried away.
Great. I not only have an Englishman on my hands, who will put me through the ringer as far as his voice and word choices, but he's a broken-hearted bloke at that. If he manages to open himself up to Willie, it'll break him all over again if she chooses Tyler.
Now what do I do?
Monday, January 14, 2013
Creating characters is fun
For my new mystery, I decided to add in a little romance. Having never juggled two boyfriends before, I started out with just one cowboy, although now I'm thinking he'll have a little competition. His name is Tyler Ransome. I'm not going to tell you his whole story because as I wrote his journal, I found a surprising subplot.
Here's part of what Tyler had to say:
Here's part of what Tyler had to say:
I don’t even know how my life turned out so wrong when I
thought I was doing everything right. I followed my dad’s example. He was a
good man who always played by the rules. Honorable. Hard working. He built our
ranch in Wyoming from nothing to a respectable cattle and cowhorse operation. Mom
was a rodeo queen he met at the Calgary Stampede. She was beautiful, smart, and
as much in love with Dad as he was with her.
People used to stare at them when they first married. They
were an odd-looking couple. John (my dad) was a small wiry guy who packed
plenty of muscle in that short frame. His folks were mostly from England. My
mom’s people were from Norway. Ingrid was tall and blonde and towered over Dad
by a bunch of inches.
They raised two sons and three daughters together, worked
the ranch all day long in all weather, and still held hands when they went to
church on Sundays.
My brother Jacob was the oldest. It naturally fell to him to
take over Dad’s business. The rest of us kids didn’t mind. Jake loved the ranch
and loved working it. My sister Katy went off to college and became a vet,
which left her no time to take care of a ranch. Sarah married a cowboy up in
Canada and is building his business with him and their three kids. Maggie’s the
baby—she’s still drifting around trying to figure out what she wants to do when
she grows up. We all hope she finds out someday. In the meantime, Jake and his
wife, Elle, pay her to help out with their kids and the house while Elle helps
out in the field. Saves them from hiring one more ranch hand.
Even as a kid, I had a knack for horses. Just got along with
them, could figure out how to make them do what I wanted instead of what they
wanted. Any time Dad got an ornery colt or a stubborn filly in, he’d just hand
the lead rope over to me and say, “They’re all yours, Ty. Work your magic.”
Some folks say I got
the best of my parents. I’m tall, like my mom, and have her blue eyes and her
inability to sit down and relax. I got my dad’s strong jaw and
stubbornness. Ever since grade school, the girls would giggle and call me Tyler
Handsome. I guess I could have used that to my advantage and gotten all
big-headed about it, but lucky for me, I had a family around me to put me down
a peg or twelve when I needed it. Jake’s two years older than me and about six
inches shorter, but he can still kick my ass. And my sisters were always quick
to point out when my hair was stuck up all lop-sided, or if I
had something in my teeth or a pimple on my nose.
Trust me, I never thought I was God’s gift. No one gave me
that privilege.
I was twenty-two when I graduated from the University of
Wyoming with a degree in business. I had already decided I was going to be a
horse trainer. I tried my hand in Wyoming, but it’s a hard land with a lot of
miles between neighbors. Soon, I went down to Texas and found work with a
couple of trainers, assisting them and learning how to deal with clients and
the business end as well as the horses. Horses I could manage. People are
tougher.
I finally moved to a stable in Arizona and set up my own
shingle. Thought about making up some fancy name, but decided to keep it
simple. “Tyler Ransome Training.” I only had a couple of clients with pretty
rank horses. It was okay. I was building a business.
It took me five years, but I finally had ten steady clients
and a QH stud, Sonny, of my own. When I started, I took anyone who wanted to train
their horse to do anything. Now I had clients who competed in reining. Reining
is a good event, mostly because the shows pay money to the winners. It’s so
much better than just a blue ribbon.
I was living as cheaply as I could and saving as much money
as possible, which is hard to do when you’re also trying to keep your horse
shod and vaccinated and competing. The stable’s board fees kept going up, too,
threatening my clients. Horses are a luxury, and when times get tough, the
first thing to go is the training, then the horse. I knew I needed my own place
if I was to ever control costs.
I talked it over with my family and they agreed to lend me
the money for down payment on a ranch. I found a nice twenty-acre place on the
outskirts of Scottsdale, not far from the stable. It needed a lot of work,
which I was willing to do.
A few years later, I was doing all right. I leased part of my
place to a Western trainer, had ten nice clients, and took them all to the best
shows. That’s when I met Melissa. She was beautiful and outgoing. She rode
horses and had competed in AQHYA events. I confess I saw a little of my mom in
her, with those blue eyes and blonde hair. I thought I had found what my dad
had.
I was wrong. Melissa may have had some of my mom’s
beauty, but she wasn't much on the inside. She “let” me handle most everything on
the ranch, unless it was her own horse, which she took care of. The household
work was left mostly to the housecleaner I had before I married. Melissa was
spoiled, but I loved her and was unable to see her as anything but lively and
outgoing. Her family had money and knew a lot of people. She got me going out
to parties and introduced me to those wealthy folks. Soon, I had another level
of clientele—the kind who could spend hundreds of thousands on a good horse.
I was mostly happy, until we had our two boys, Zachary and
Seth. I loved being a dad and had all these notions about raising my sons the
way I was raised. I had such happy memories of working the ranch all day with
my dad, then coming in to the smell of something good on the stove that my mom
cooked for dinner.
Melissa had other ideas. She nagged at me to get a nanny for
the boys so she could continue to go shopping and lolling around with her
girlfriends. It was the first time I ever said no, and I was surprised and
angry when she went to her daddy, got the money, and hired the nanny anyway.
Seemed like that was the beginning of the end for us. The
unhappier I got, the more time she spent away from the house. She started to
come home late, drunk. I was worried that she’d cause an accident, or get killed
in one. When I tried to talk to her about it, she’d say I was old-fashioned and
needed to lighten up. Even two DUIs didn’t stop her.
I’ll never forget our last evening together. We went to a
party at her friend’s house. It was a birthday party for their daughter, who
was turning six and a friend of Zach’s. I didn’t exactly want to go, but I knew
the couple and knew there would be adult beverages. I wanted to be there, to be the
designated driver.
Let's just say that night changed my life.
There was a year-long nightmare of court appearances, where
I fought my wife for control of my ranch, custody of my remaining son, everything. After a year and a half, I had had enough. I was on the
verge every day, on the verge of either killing myself or killing her. Neither
of those options were healthy. I sat down at my desk and signed all the papers.
The divorce papers, the custody papers, the settlement agreements, everything
that gave her everything I owned. All she allowed me to keep was my truck and
trailer, and my stud horse.
She only let me keep my stud because she thought he had laminitis. Seems like the vet gave her some false information, and I wasn't in the mood to correct her. Okay, so it wasn't my finest moment, but I needed that horse.
After that, I wrote a letter to my clients, giving them
notice. Bless their hearts, they had believed in me and stuck with me through
the whole ordeal. Melissa thought I would continue to train on the ranch—my
ranch that she owned. Somehow she would continue to punish me for her sins.
Well, I’m no Jesus.
I wrote a letter to Zach and sent it to my brother to give
to my son. I hoped he would be able to see his nephew.
Then I loaded Sonny in the trailer and drove.
Texas might have made more sense, but I went west instead
and ended up in southern California. I guess I wanted to get lost in a crowd of
people. I also guess I thought people in California tend to be a little more
understanding about a fella who lost it all.
It’s been three years now, and I’m building a new business,
renting space at an equestrian center. I’ve got five clients. Only one of them
does reining. The rest do pleasure events—horsemanship and trail and
showmanship. And four of them have Quarter horses. The fifth has a Paint. I’m
going to smaller shows and doing different things, but I’m surviving.
I miss Zach until it aches sometimes. And I wish that
ex-wife of mine would die. Does that sound harsh?
Stay tuned to meet more of the cast.
Subscribe to:
Posts (Atom)
