Proof that I'm not yet a Jedi master

Well, damn.

I got my proof copy of Hit or Missus in the mail today. The cover looks great. I haven't gone page-by-page on the interior, but the first pass looks good. Print font and size are good. So are the margins.

But the back cover, oy, the back cover... I wrote up a jacket blurb that I thought would be interesting, would be compelling, would pull you into reading the rest of it. When Joe sent me the finished product, it looked good. The real thing, however -

There are too many words, aren't there?

Please, be honest. I know you probably won't be able to read the cover (see this entry to read the words - Jacket Blurb #2), but there are too many words on the back, aren't there?

It's not too late to re-do it. I could instead put the jacket blurb as this:

"How far would you go to help a friend? P.I. Peri Minneopa finds out when she takes a case spying on a cheating wife and ends up being hunted by the wife's circle of pals.

After all, a friend will help you move - a good friend will help you move a body."


Any of you Peeps got any ideas?